A Poem, No More Pins

I wrote this poem yesterday, and it is written from an interesting perspective. It is a doll that knows its purpose but does not want to be punished for wrongdoings anymore.

I anticipate the pins
Sharp with pain, it pierces me
Now the healing begins
My lips sewn shut but still I plea
I don’t want to feel this pain
I see the hand approach to punish again
With all my might, I strain
I’ll continue to grow my disdain
Ironic that I am the enforcer of revenge
I breathe in all the hate my lungs can hold
Through my pain and suffering, I’ll avenge
Through my eyes, I can watch your demise unfold
I am not a doll but an effigy to punish thee
Please stop doing wrong; I do not want pins in me


Let me know what you think!
Thanks for reading!
Travis

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42 thoughts on “A Poem, No More Pins

  1. Very neat idea. I also wrote a poem from a doll’s perspective, years ago. I would share it but who knows in which pit of my lost works it has been lost. Lol
    I think it’s such fun when a writer switches perspective like you have. Thanks you!

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    1. Glad you liked it! I always try to create something unique with my poems. You should try and find your poem! That’s really neat you did one as well. Thank you so much for reading and the compliment. 😁

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    1. Muahahah! Good! I had fun doing this one. 😁 Thank you for saying that! The Crucible, there’s a beauty. I searched way too long for that image. I needed the perfect image to represent the creepy poem. Definitely worth it in the end. 🤗

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      1. Well, good, because I enjoyed reading it. 😄 The best part of that play is the dramatic ending, where Proctor chooses to not confess in writing and keep his reputable name instead. The poppet (doll) scenes are creepy, like your image. 😨 The poem is solid, can’t put a pin in that! haha

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      2. You often see it where the endings lose luster, and we are left feeling unsatisfied, but I agree, it was very dramatic, and I was happy with it. I appreciate the creepy scenes like you mentioned. Ahhhhh, I see what you did there! Clever Michele…very clever! 😂😁

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  2. Another interesting perspective. My friend used to work with a lady who was supposedly a voodoo master. I would have loved to gotten my hand on one of these dolls for someone that did me wrong, but never thought of it from the pain the doll endures. Very nice! 🙂

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    1. Haha! I hear you there! That’s what I was thinking too when I wrote it. We never hear it from the doll’s perspective. I figured it would create a unique experience and went for it. Thanks for the support!

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    1. Muhaha! Yes, definitely on the creepy side. Glad you loved it. I figured it was from an interesting perspective and just had some fun with it. Thanks for reading and the encouragement ! 😁

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  3. Wow. This is very, very good! I tend to always find myself leaning towards dark and twisty aspects with writing, and this definitely hit that with such a unique perspective. Even though this is about a doll, I feel many might be able to relate. Loved it.

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    1. That’s awesome to hear! That’s exactly how I am too! I lean towards darker sometimes a macabre style of writing. A little while ago, I read your post called “The Red Witch” and wanted to compliment you on that work. I enjoyed it very much and look forward to more from you. It is so awesome we have similar writing styles and really happy we got connected. 😁

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      1. Score! I’m not the only one who ventures on the dark side. Lol.

        And wow, thank you! I definitely left it unfinished and need to sit my butt down and actually write more of it. My writing tends to be at random and based more on my mood, I guess? But, I definitely appreciate that. I look forward to see more of you pieces too!

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      2. Haha! Yeah, I was thinking the same thing. My writing style is such a contrast from my real personality. I can be kind of a goofball. 😊 Yeah, that does make sense. Take your time with your writing and when the mood strikes, write. Quality over quantity is what I always say. I do the same thing as well. It works well for me because it keeps me from getting burned out. I hope you add to it. That little piece gave a nice taste of your creativity. 🤗

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      3. Right?! I am so… awkward. Ha. A huge participant of the introvert committee 🤣

        I totally agree with you on focusing more on quality. It is best to let the art of our words flow and to not rush it. And thanks again! I am all for fantasy fiction, so I thought I would dabble in it. 🙂

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      4. Haha! You are too funny. “I am so… awkward” 😂. I legit lol’d reading that whole part.
        Exactly! Very important to be tactical when working on this type of stuff. Formulate a routine that is comfortable to you and then let the creative juices flow!
        So cool to hear you love the fantasy fiction. Me too! My whole life is a fantasy, haha.
        Is this real? Are….are you really real? Am I real? Maybe…I am a character in someone’s fantasy novel?!?! 🤯

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  4. Bahaha whoa… “mind blown”

    I would kill to be a heroine in a fantasy novel. Like, let me kung fu the sh*t out of all these enemies and then blast my epic powers at them to seal the deal and save the world… like no big deal. All while having some sort of witty remark to make me cooler.

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    1. There ya go! That sounds like an awesome fantasy novel! You’ll say something like, “I hope you get a kick out of this” ((roundhouse kick)). You’ll be roundhouse kicking everything and anything that moves. The villains will see a tornado in the distance getting closer. As it gets closer, they realize it’s you unleashing a tornado of roundhouse kicks. They try fleeing in fear but can’t run fast enough. 😁😂

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      1. Begging for their lives once they realize it’s me. YESS! I’m here for it. That whole scene just had me thinking of the anime Naruto. I don’t know if you have ever watched it, but it reminded me of when Neji uses 8 trigrams 128 palms. Ha.

        *sigh* if only… I guess that’s why we read books and write because we love it live more than one life. Haha.

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      2. Lol, I absolutely love your enthusiasm, it’s so infectious.🙃 I haven’t watched it before but I just looked it up and watched it on YouTube, haha. That definitely works! We’ll just insert your face on Neji and we’ll be off to a nice start. 🤗
        Good point! Writing is such a great outlet and escape because we can create anything we want! It’s awesome.

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