I am now on a kick of spring haikus; I can’t help it. Here is another spring-related haiku that came to mind this morning.
Nature’s ebb and flow
Song birds wake the dormant life
Life on Earth renewed
Let me know what you think!
Thanks for reading!
Travis
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A beautiful season is upon us. Lovely lines to celebrate the upcoming arrival! 🌻
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Yes! I just glanced at the upcoming temps and they are looking so good. Woo! Thank you! 🤗
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Very nice Haiku
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Oh, thank you for the compliment! Thank you for reading and the support! I greatly appreciate it! ☺️
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It is beautiful.
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Thank you Lokesh! Glad you loved it!
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Flow , wake and renew are creating a good impact on readers mind.
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Absolutely, my friend. I can’t wait to read your haikus. Hopefully you still plan on doing some!
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I’m little nervous Travis.
I have a lot of fear inside me. I give up very easily when I face a problem. But I will try :
Fear
Fear kills your dreams,
belief gives you power and direction,
don’t fear to dream.
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Can’t be afraid to try, my friend. Good to see you shared it!
It’s fine. I like it.
1st line is 4 syllables
2nd is 10 syllables
3rd is 4 syllables
The 5-7-5 structure is generally accepted as the traditional English haikus, but it’s widely subjective. The original Japanese haikus were known to be done with fewer syllables. Your 1st and 3rd lines are more in line with the traditional Japanese haikus, which is great. If you could bring your 2nd line down from 10 syllables to 7, you’ll have an even better haiku, if not excellent haiku! So if we turn this interaction into a little collaboration effort, using your 1st and 3rd line and shortening the 2nd line, I came up with this as an example:
4-7-4 structure
Fear kills your dreams,
belief bestows confidence,
don’t fear to dream.
If you like the 2nd line change, feel free to use it as your own!
Nonetheless, an excellent job, my friend! 👏
I just recently started writing haikus again. It has been years for me. So if I missed any key points I am sure the WP community will offer some excellent insight.
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songbirds wake the dormant life.
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😁
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Beautiful spring haiku, Travis! 🌸
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Thank you for the compliment! 🤗 Never too early for spring! Thank you for reading and the support! 😊
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My pleasure! 😉
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Beautiful haiku!
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Thank you so much for the kind words! 🙏🤗
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One of those beauties of nature!
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I agree! Such a beautiful time of the year. 🤗
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This is my fave of your spring ones so far! “Ebb and flow” 💚
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That’s awesome!!! Glad you loved it. Yeah, I saw the opportunity to use “ebb and flow” and I couldn’t resist. 🥰
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Oh wow. That is rejuvenating and lovely. 👌🌸
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Oh, thank you! Glad you loved it. I love when springtime comes around!🙏😁
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Lovely
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Thank you! Thanks for reading!😁
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beautiful words to describe the magic power of nature, thanks for sharing Travis!
Yuurs, Sovely
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You’re welcome! Thank you so much for reading and the encouragement! 😁🙏
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it’s my pleasure. All the best, Sovely
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Love this Haiku💛🌷 Thank you for sharing your spring joy🌷💛
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Oh, wow! Thank you for the compliment! I greatly appreciate it! Glad you loved it. You’re welcome! 🤗
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Very nice 👍
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Thank you! Thanks for reading and the encouragement!🌞
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This is my favorite time of year, and your poem is lovely. 🌷
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Thank you for the compliment. Glad you liked it. I agree, such a beautiful time of the year.
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You’re welcome 😉
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A beautiful haiku, Travis! 🌷
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Thank you so much, Eugenia! I love this time of year! 🤗
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My pleasure, Travis! 😊
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Beautifully-written, Travis!
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Thank you so much for the compliment. Glad you enjoyed it! Thank you so much for reading and the support! 😁
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You’re very welcome, Travis. 🙂
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the dormant life being woke up be spring❤❤i think this season automatically makes you feel better even if you dont think of it…the green the flowers and the freshness in the air❤it feels like a season of heaven on earth💯
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I agree! The change in the weather and the lives that were dormant all vibrant and happy. It definitely enhances a person’s mood. 😊🙏
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Wow! I love your haiku, Travis! 🙂 Thanks so much for sharing this — it’s beautiful! 😀
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Oh wow, thank you for the compliment, Sophia! It’s great to hear that you loved it. You’re welcome, it was my pleasure! Thank you so much for reading and the support. It is greatly appreciated! 😁🤗
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“Song birds wake the dormant life”
This is amazing! Great blog!
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Thank you for the compliment! I felt those words summed up the beginning of spring so well. Thanks for the encouragement and support! It truly means a lot. 😁🙏
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It’s my pleasure 😊🙏
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